Feedback from Tutor

[yonkyu]

I sent my paper to the writing center to be reviewed by a tutor. It was for today and I was anxious to get home to find out what was said.

It was not as BAD as I thought it would be.

You make a great observation here about how verbal communication can be used to gain control!

Again, you have some great information and observations here! I can also really understand how you’ve organized this paper, breaking the verbal communication down into three main categories.

There’s nothing objectively wrong with including a lot of details; the important thing to consider is whether your draft is appropriate in scope to meet the requirements of your assignment.

Again, good information in this paper, Erin – I just think that you are including more information than your assignment calls for.

Reading these lines and statements for feedback made me smile. I made my points and shared great information and observations!!! I need to be more concise - short and to the point. Not stray from the topic. Less is better not more. So I feel really good about my ability to write!!!!!

Comments

[yonkyu.livejournal.com]

Thank you!! My tutor assured myself that I have the ability to write and get my point across. It's about being clear and concise and straight to the point then getting lost in details and explaining it too much.